"De-Coated" for @rhondak

in #fiction7 years ago (edited)

CLOUDS FLOCK TOGETHER LIKE MEAN GIRLS plotting to rain on my parade. De-coated, but not defeated, I phone my evil daughter. I practice sounding stern and cold and calm: “I want my coat back.”

Voice mail. Which she never checks. Well, I have a way around that.

I put on the stupid blue coat someone swapped with mine during the funeral luncheon. White church behind me, clouds above me, shivering fir trees around me, wind whipping my hair: perfect! I fumble for the Insta-snap app, the selfie icon, the red dot that means I’m recording.

“Listen up, Phetamina.” That’s her user name.

With a sudden, sharp, prolonged breath, I realize she got it off my Rx label. Amphetamine salts.

I try to hit “off” but must have hit send. Oops. I don’t know how to abort this video.

Well, she had it coming.

I start filming again. The note that came with the coat. Pink-ink on college-rule notebook paper. I recite, in snide-girl: “Please accept my apologies, and a new and better coat.” Snort. “I’m leaving a terrible home life and need to get away incognito. Keep the scarf, and consider yourself my guardian angel.”

Six seconds is all ya get before Insta-snap goes into send mode? I’m not even close to done yet.

Take Four: “Terrible home life, Phetamina? We took your phone away for one week. Because you blocked me from all social media. I want my coat back. You are so, so busted, you--”

Take Five: “You like this bettuh, Pheta-mina?” I angle my body for the camera. “A trendy new packable puff coat instead of my so-called dead animal, which isn’t even fur, but leopard print fleece, thank you very much, and now I look like a sausage, stuffed into a blue casing, you little--”

I don’t know how many words got cut off when my six seconds ran out, and I can’t play the video, so I snap a selfie with the roiling clouds. The white steeple underscores my righteous wrath.

GMuxx's Writing Contest #2; art prompt, this photo by @torico

Thirty years old, that coat, and it still fit, unlike others that came and went as I bore four daughters and the assorted hallmarks of a half-century of life.

The phone buzzes in my hand. I swipe the screen.

“Mom! It wasn’t me this time,” the youngest of my evil offspring dares me to believe.

I try counting to ten and make it to one. “If I find my coat at Goodwill again--”

“It wasn’t me!” Always interrupting her mother, that spoiled little Millennial. Using that tone of voice, that know-it-all attitude I have never modeled, least of all to my own mother.

“Terrible home life,” I shout, a tremor in my voice. “You and your First World Problems. You’ve read Anne Frank. You--”

“Mom. I did not write that note. And if someone took your dead animal to Goodwill, you’ll have to look in their trash bin. There’s a reason you found it on the Last Chance rack. You couldn’t pay someone to wear that coat.”

“Well, someone must be wearing it right now.” And feeling very retro, very adult, in my coat.

I hang up and feel for the note, which I’d stuffed into a pocket. Does my Emma have pink ink? Does she even know words like incognito?

The stupid coat is soft, lightweight, surprisingly warm and comfy. Maybe I’d get one someday, in black. But I still want my “dead animal” back.

Fractured blue lights swirl around me. Police? What’d I do? The girls threaten me with child abuse if I so much as glare at them, but this--this calls for war.

The car blocks me from crossing the street. An officer steps out, looking at his hand-held, then at me. “That’s the scarf, all right.”

Crimson and yellow, hand knitted, in harlequin. I actually like the scarf. A lot.

“Ma’am, we need you to come with us.”

He escorts me into the back seat. Of a squad car. Me!

Thanks to my Insta-videos, they recognized the coat and the church, where another officer is hunting down clues. Never before have I seen police respond that fast to anything. Computers, algorithms. They’re quicker than guardian angels.

At the station they demand my name, rank, and serial number.

“This girl,” they show me a photo of a girl in the coat and scarf I’ve been stripped of, “Kim Dewitt, was reported missing by her parents. They’re afraid she may have run away with a man she met on Instagram.”

Terrible home life? The nerve. Oh, the stupendous stupidity of that girl.

“I’d like to report a stolen coat,” I say.

They don’t give a rat’s ass about my coat. To be fair, if my Evil Offspring had run off with a stranger from the internet, I’d do anything to keep her from suffering the consequences of a choice as catastrophic as that.

A scuffle of bodies and loud voices, and into the station comes… my coat!

“I ain’t done no wrong,” says a tall man wearing my coat over a pink Power Rangers costume. It stops six inches above his bare feet, and he’s so skinny, I’m not surprised he can fit into a child’s castoff.

“Like I tol’ you,” the man says, “I found it in the street. I din’t see who throw it. I din’t see no car.”

Not for a minute do I believe he’s the internet stranger Kim Dimwit ran off with.

I’m lost in the shuffle as they sort it out with the poor homeless man.

My coat sleeves stop at his elbows. Inspired, I slip out the door and hustle to the Goodwill store near the station. There, on the Last Chance rack, is a nice London Fog with a zip-out lining. Add a hat, scarf and gloves. Later, I’ll figure out his shoe size.

Ooh, and here is a jacket just my size, with big black buttons and faux fur trim. Forty-four cents. Only at Goodwill!

Back at the station, the man is standing like a fashion model, hands on hips, nose in the air, waiting in statuesque silence as an officer types notes into a laptop.

And there is my daughter. She saunters up from behind and claps the man’s shoulder. “Nice coat.”

His glassy eyes come to life, like street lights at dusk. He turns a slow 360, a peacock on the runway.

Emma glares at me. “Told ya it wasn’t me.”

“This time.”

"Wait'll you hear about this teen runaway's home life. You might stop jumping to so many conclusions."

She could be right, but I'm done letting my daughter chastise me in public. Too much of that with the coat, already, which I would get back, and wear again, no matter what anyone said about my "dead animal."

I hold up the trench coat and try to get the homeless man’s attention. “I’ll trade ya. This is a much nicer, warmer coat.”

He flicks his gaze over the London Fog and crows with laughter.

It occurs to me that he could find better fitting, better looking castoffs than a pink Power Rangers costume. He likes my “dead animal.” He wears it with a saucy confidence I need to emulate.

It also occurs to me I'll never get my coat back.

“Mom.” Emma takes that tone with me. “You’re in trouble for leaving the station without their go-ahead.” Her tone shifts, authoritative and oddly familiar. “Our home phone rang. Imagine my surprise when it was the police. Looking for Lynette Bennet.”

When did she start sounding like someone’s mother?

Bossy little thing.


A big thank you to @sammosk for his Make a Minnow challenge

https://steemit.com/makeaminnow/@sammosk/a-polite-hello-from-me-to-you-minnowsupport-teamaustralia-msp-suportnetwork-introducing-makeaminnow (Bex would know how to format this into a "click here" - we only get seven days to edit, so I'd better hustle to master the ol' hyperlink. I can find the icon for it at my wordpress blog. Steemit, I'm still floundering.)

I pledge to donate SDB income from the upvotes on this post to Steemit Fiction Trail, or Curation payouts, or wherever @rhondak needs funds most. Rhonda works long, mostly unpaid days to make steemit a great home for fiction writers. She created #fiction-workshop and a curation trail, SFT, and things I don’t even understand. Thanks to Rhonda doing the work to launch new projects, writers are being curated every week. I still don’t understand what that means, but Rhonda gets it, she does it, and you can always count on Rhonda to get the job done, whatever the job is. You can also count on Bex, Muxxy, @jrhughes, @anarcho-andrei, and other workshoppers to keep things flowing. (And keep it fun.)

Here's another story in Rhonda's honor, with an extra thanks to @bex-dk for help with formatting, and with other techno-issues that would shut me down, if not for the support of fellow Fictioneers at #fiction-workshop. I’m not even certain I can appropriate Muxxy’s words and say I’m a member of the #minnowsupportproject – which is brought to you by @aggroed, @ausbitbank, @teamsteem, and @canadian-coconut. (Let me check in settings, and that PAL icon (Peace, Abundance, Liberty) to see if I've checked the right boxes... poof! ... my dogs are barking. Be back in a few, and I'll try to catch up.

THANK YOU everyone. I'm not a Luddite. Honest. Just a techno-klutz.

  • This piece is additionally entered in GMuxx's Art Prompt Contest.
    *Coat Photo thanks to Joshua Earle
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Carol, it may have taken a bit, but you have MADE YOUR MARK on Steemit with your fiction now. Passport to Glory, now this... If you think we are letting you spend most of your time hiding behind your red editor pen in the future, you can think again!

Uh-oh. Umm... thank you Bex, and aggroed, and Thinknzombie, and everyone - @tremendospercy! Where have you been?

I don't think I've ever been attached to a coat as much as her, pants yes but not a coat.

Calling on @originalworks for an upvote.

The homeless man in the pink Power Ranger costume: on Michigan Avenue in Chicago during the week the Cubs won the World Series. I've been wanting to put him in a story. This calls for a sequel.

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The coat was my sister's. Her daughters really did call it a "dead animal." To my horror, I learned that she recently donated the coat to Goodwill. She, the mother, did this! And she wasn't happy to part with it.

NJ Carol! Way to catch a Curie vote.

This is the most fun I've had in....... I dunno. Not September. But weeks, anyway! LOL Love it!!!

Love it! And the nomination too!

I'm saving my upvote for later, but for now, just wanted to say this is an awesome little story, and I'm sooo glad the coat was faux fur! :-)

Thanks Rhonda, and thanks @andrewgenaille for invoking the bot.

Rhonda, the mother vs millennial daughter is a theme you will recognize - and of COURSE the fur is faux!

woow very good, one gets caught up in reading and you can not go out, it's an incredible thing and the soul arrives peacefully, thank you very much for sharing

thanks rushinho027!

Yay! I love it, and Carol got CURIED!

See that blatant "all-caps," @carolkean? Lol!

Ha - LOVE it, jrhughes - thanks so much!

Any time. Thrilled to see you writing and being recognized here ❤️

This piece is totally on another level of writing

No wonder you got curied

Ooh, "totally on another level of writing" - that's high tribute, indeed. Thank you!!

good story and
cool church pictures
thank for sharing !!!!